The Hero You WON’T See In Shades Of Desire
My brand tagline is “Brave the darkness, discover the light.” I adore redeemed characters and a satisfying HEA, but I especially love making my characters work for these things. However, sometimes I go a little overboard on the “dark” aspects of my stories. Such was the case with my manuscript, Lights Out, which ultimately became Shades Of Desire, my recent release with HQN.
Several years ago, I came up with the idea of a famous photographer who loses her vision and must help solve a murder investigation. I wrote and rewrote the first few chapters several times, but the story always seemed a bit off. Once I sold the story to my editor, she told me why—I’d created a heroine dealing with a dark tragedy but I’d also created a hero with arguably even darker issues (he’d lost his only son to leukemia, been abandoned by his wife, and then had to face a serial killer while on the edge of burn out). Perfectly good backstory, but combined with other dark elements in the story, it was just too much, especially for a romance. It took someone else pointing this out to me and giving me some guidance, but toning down is what this particular story needed.
Do you like outtakes? Just for fun, I thought I’d attach an old scene from Lights Out that didn’t make it into Shades Of Desire. This shows my hero on the edge and taking out his emotional torment on the job. I concluded that even with his internal suffering, some readers might just find his behavior too un-hero-like to take.
DELETED SCENE FROM LIGHTS OUT:
It was hard to forget about death when the damn thing refused to leave you alone.
Even as Jack Talbert’s meaty fist slammed his head back and split his lip, Detective Liam “Mac” McKenzie barely felt any pain. Certainly not enough to stifle the echo of words in his head.
My place is with the dead.
My place is with you.
In defiance of those words, Mac swiped his hand across his lip, then shook his head.
He was barely bleeding. Smiling, he motioned Talbert on. “You’re disappointing me, Talbert. I know you can do better than that.”
Talbert, breath heaving from their struggles, backed up, eyes wide with disbelief. He didn’t have far to go. They’d chased him into a dead-end alley, but Talbert hadn’t given up. Mac would be damned if he let him now.
Reading his mind, Talbert shook his head. “You’re crazy, McKenzie. I surrender. Take me in.”
“Yeah, Mac. Enough of this—“
Mac glared at his temporary partner, Jason Tyler, who stood a few feet away, muscles tensed, one hand on the butt of his gun and the other raised with his radio at the ready. Calmly, Mac explained, “The bastard resisted arrest.”
“He’s giving up.”
“Not yet,” Mac insisted.
Jason fell silent, but the disgust in his eyes spoke for him.
Mac didn’t give a shit. He wanted to release the tight rein he normally kept on his emotions. The ruthless control he used to dull the grief and regret that was nevertheless always there. He was going to take advantage of the opportunity.
My place is with the dead.
Turning back to Talbert, Mac smiled once more. “Now hit me again. And this time, put some power behind it.”
****
I hope you enjoyed the deleted scene. I’ll probably always write darker stories. As such, I can’t censor myself during the writing process. I push the envelope and go where the story takes me. Sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn’t. The key is being flexible and, after the story is written, being open minded enough to view things another way.
SHADES OF DESIRE:
“Yeah, Mac. Enough of this—“
Mac glared at his temporary partner, Jason Tyler, who stood a few feet away, muscles tensed, one hand on the butt of his gun and the other raised with his radio at the ready. Calmly, Mac explained, “The bastard resisted arrest.”
“He’s giving up.”
“Not yet,” Mac insisted.
Jason fell silent, but the disgust in his eyes spoke for him.
Mac didn’t give a shit. He wanted to release the tight rein he normally kept on his emotions. The ruthless control he used to dull the grief and regret that was nevertheless always there. He was going to take advantage of the opportunity.
My place is with the dead.
Turning back to Talbert, Mac smiled once more. “Now hit me again. And this time, put some power behind it.”
****
I hope you enjoyed the deleted scene. I’ll probably always write darker stories. As such, I can’t censor myself during the writing process. I push the envelope and go where the story takes me. Sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn’t. The key is being flexible and, after the story is written, being open minded enough to view things another way.
SHADES OF DESIRE:
Book 1 in the Special Investigations Group Series, available at Amazon, B&N, Powell’s and Indie Bound
Natalie Jones is the lucky survivor of an elusive killer who preys on young women and then disappears from view. And since her harrowing ordeal, the once gutsy photojournalist has remained isolated in her home, paralyzed by fear and her failing vision.
Special Agent Liam “Mac” McKenzie has scars of his own. But despite his efforts to ignore the attraction that simmers between him and Natalie, he needs her help to catch a predator. Soon, they will forge a tentative alliance—charged with desire.
Through a soft-focus lens, Natalie dares to envision a future with Mac beyond the investigation...never guessing that the clues hidden within her photographs are drawing them into an explosive confrontation with a madman.
LOVE BITES, a charitable pet anthology, releases June 1, 2012. This anthology includes a novella by Virna, as well as novellas by Lori Foster, Brenda Jackson, Catherine Mann, and Jules Bennett. Don't miss these never-before-published "tails" of couples whose pets give them a new leash on love...
*Note: This anthology is published by HQN and is available as an e-book only. [Limited print copies will be available at Lori Foster's Annual Reader and Author Get Together (June 1-2, 2012; registration now closed)]
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Bio:
Virna DePaul is a former criminal prosecutor and now national bestselling author of the Para-Ops Novels (Chosen By Sin, Book 3 now available; see www.chosenbysin.com.) Virna also writes contemporary romantic suspense for Harlequin Romantic Suspense (It Started That Night, May 2012) and HQN (Shades Of Desire, June 2012). Finally, Virna is a national bestselling author of numerous indie published novels. Sign up for her mailing list for access to her monthly writing cheat sheets and reader contests. www.virnadepaul.com
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23 comments:
Congrats on your latest release, Virna.
I love Virna's Para-Ops series and Virna herself is awesome :-) Looking forward to meeting her in person at RWA this year! I haven't read her romantic suspense books yet, but I definitely want to!!
Shades of Desire has been added to my TBR. Thanks for sharing the deleted scene :-)
Thanks very much for the giveaway!
Congrats on the newest release! Thanks for a fun interview and giveaway!
Great post! I keep hearing about Virna's books and am definitely going to be adding her to my TBR!
Congrats on the re-release! I LOVE Virna's books...thx for the opportunity to win one! :)
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Hi!
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Sounds like an exciting read!
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Good post. I have a copy of "Shades of Desire" and I can't wait to read it. Thanks for the giveaway!
Congrats to Virna on the new release.
Hi Virna! Just stopping by to show my love! Congrats on your newest release!
Cathy M, Thanks so much!
Amber Hughes, Thank you for addition SOD to your TBR. It's always good to "see" you! :)
erin, Thank y ou! Glad you enjoyed the post.
DiDi, Thanks. Good luck with the giveaway!
Barbara, Yay! Thanks so much!
miki, Good to see you, too! Good luck and take care, V
mcv, Thanks!
Maria D., I hope you enjoy SOD. Good luck with the giveaway.
Jane, Thank you and thanks for commenting!
Megan, Thank you for the support and congrats! Hope you're doing well. :)
Congrats on the new release. Thanks for a great interview and giveaway. Put it on my wishlist.
That's interesting about how a story can look so different from the one that originally came to the author. I thought the outtake was an interesting piece to explore the character.
Thanks for the post and for the giveaway opportunity.
Thanks for this opportunity. I am definitely putting the Para Ops series on my TRL. Thanks for the post.
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Sounds great, thanks for the interview!!
Great post...thoroughly enjoyed reading it!
I often wonder about changes made to stories. It's great to gain some insight.
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I just love Virna DePaul as an author. Her Para-Ops series is one of my favs and her other forays have been really great as well. Glad to read this interview here! sdylion(at)gmail(dot)com
I love Virna DePaul's writing style. I am really looking forward to starting this new series.
hi virna..
nice to meet you..i never read any your books but i interest for reading..putting in it my TBR..
congrats on your latest release..success for you ^^
thanks for the giveaway ^^
Joanne, Thank you & good luck with the giveaway!
Sophia Rose - Glad you enjoyed the outtake!! :)
Carol L. -Thanks for stopping by. Hope you give the Para-Ops team a try! :)
Emily - Thanks for commenting!
Timitra - Yay! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
marybelle - Lots of stuff gets thrown out before the book is printed. It's both fun and challenging sometimes.
SdyLion - Thank you so much. I very much appreciate your support!!! :D
Jen B. - Thank you!! Hope you enjoy the series and good luck with the giveaway.
Dian Aesha - Nice to meet you! Thanks for stopping by.
Wow love that cover...way hot!
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hi virna! congrats for the book. i like the cover, hope i;ll enjoy the story as well
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